User blog:Ilovescream/My Movie

hi screamers,

so recently i decided to make make my own movie which I announced on a previous blog post, some people may already be aware of this, I dream of becoming a screenwrite and have written a scene that could be added to my movie which I plan on calling Frankenstein because the killer will wear a frankenstein mask, one day I hope I will make a succesful movie so I decided not to make a scream film but it will include the basic ideas included in scream such as a masked killer, here is the opening scene-feedback please! I've gotten rid of the original opening scene where Jonothan davies was the opening victim and improved it, the scene i have now is similar to the one I originally wrote for my version of scream 5 please read it, thanks!

 Opening Scene: The death of Marina Moyer and Lindsey Morez

 The screen shows a young girl aged about 17 – Marina Moyer running a bath, the phone rings so she goes into her bedroom to answers it and sits on the bed to talk 

 Marina: Hello, who is this?

 Killer: why don’t you tell me your name first?

 Marina: Uh I don’t give my name out to strangers now what do you want?

 Killer: Let me ask you a question… Marina –

 Marina: do I know you?!

 Killer: Listen bitch I told you I have a question! Do you know a girl called Lindsey?

 Marina: well yeah. Oh you must be the boyfriend she was talking about – Adam, I don’t know why she was bragging so much, you’re a total jerk!

 Killer: This isn’t Adam now open the closet Marina…

 Opens the closet to reveal her friend Lindsey Morez gutted and hanging from the rail 

 Marina screams 

 Marina: who the FUCK are you

 Killer: The last person you’ll see alive!

 Marina hangs up and slides under her bed with the phone still in her hand, crying causing her to breathe heavily and dials 911, there is a creaking noise downstairs 

 Man on the other end: this is 911 what is your emergency?

<p class="MsoNormal" style="margin: 0cm 0cm 10pt;"> Marina: I-I just found my friend and-and she’s dead and I-I just don’t know what to do and the killer-he called me and he’s well he’s in the house, I can hear him

<p class="MsoNormal" style="margin: 0cm 0cm 10pt;"> Man on the other end: what is your address ma’am?

<p class="MsoNormal" style="margin: 0cm 0cm 10pt;"> Marina: uh, uh 39-39 Hillford Road!

<p class="MsoNormal" style="margin: 0cm 0cm 10pt;"> Screen shows the killer (wearing a Frankenstein mask) walking up the stairs then diverts back to Marina hiding under the bed and we hear the bedroom door creak open, the screen then shows the killers feet walking past the bed, filming as if you are watching from under the bed when suddenly he peers under the bed Marina screams and slides out the other side then runs around him into the bathroom but slips on the mat beside the bath and the killer grabs her, stabs her in the stomach then throws her into the bathtub, the water turns red – opening title – Frankenstein in scrawled white writing on black background, the writing turns red then dribbles down the screen like blood 

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